originally posted in:CentauriAlpha Fan Fiction
This wasn't the first part of the series. But I didn't like the first part so I'm making it again. Enjoy!
Stryker was his name, and is his name, for he still thrives as a high respected Hunter. He didn't have a last name, nor a first name, for that matter. When he woke up on Venus, unlike all other guardians, he doesn't remember who he was before he died. His ghost was equally special in his own way. Being a adventurous ghost. He met an awoken guardian that goes by the name of Gahhan Bonterri, a warlock. Who became good friends with the hunter. In there journeys they met a Titan, an Exo. He was originally known as LARGO- 0Z51. But they he liked to be called Largos. Little did these Guardians know, there adventure had just begun.
"The skiff is gaining"! yelled Gahhan to Stryker, loading an anti-aircraft torpedo to fire at the Fallen Ship." The markings on the skiff doesn't match any of the 5 known Fallen houses", remarked Largos. As the 2 sparrows speed through the Cosmodrome. Stryker was on a side car on the side of the sparrow." That Vandal we killed earlier could belong to that Skiff's Fallen house!" Stryker suggested to Gahhan, as his side car was connected to the warlock's sparrow. "Gahhan, can't you read their Language?" Largos yelled to Gahhan. "Yes! I can!" Gahhan replied. Gahhan look at the grey and black Skiff, as it was ascending in them." House... of... Ghosts?! Guys I believe we have found a new fallen house!" Gahhan report to his fellow guardians.
"Ghost how far is the jumpship?!" Stryker said to his ghost, who them replied "5 miles!". Aiming at the Skiff, the Hunter pulled the trigger. The the velocity's reaction almost Knocked Stryker of his seat, and almost made Gahhan's sparrow flip over sideways. The warhead hit the Skiff as hard as an head-on sparrow collision, with a Goliath Tank. The last they saw of the doomed aircraft, was as the skiff was consumed with fire and grey smoke. "We are here!" remarked Strykers ghost.
Bump for part 2
I'm gonna try to make this fanfiction appeal to other fan fictions.
Part 2:
https://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/113540777/0/0
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I like the idea of a new fallen house and also the idea that sparrows are not just glorified scooters, but I have to say, it would be a much better read with correct English. Don't get me wrong I am not a native speaker and my texts are surely full of mistakes too, but there are some that are easily avoided. Have somebody proof read for you if you can't figure it out by yourself, there is no shame in that! Keep it up!!
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Plz link part two
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I like it! Though I think it could be even better! Pointers, the dialogue isn't structured the way it should be and its somewhat short. Other than that, its great!
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Liked it, nice intro Just saying how do u put a torpedo gun on a sparow?
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