originally posted in:All That Will Remain
Here are a few bio I've thought up and I would like to here feedback on your choices and on how I can improve it.
1
The lands cry out in screams, gunfire and echo's of the golden age. the land battered and abused by the darkness and there grunts. The light cover in a blanket of darkness, grabbing a hold of everything we and the earth stood for, the light fuels us the traveller enlightens us so lets tear the covers of darkness and restore light to humanity and the stars...for we are (clan name)
2
The traveller, a wonder of the universe. The traveller gave us Knowledge, a dream to explore again, a dream to leave a legacy in the galaxy. Know it calls on us to defend it, to keep it safe to keep... humanity safe, to keep a foothold in this war and it starts with us!
(clan name) will rise and vanquish the darkness threatening our world and we want you!
3
The hope, the light, the willingness to explore has gone from what is left of our kind. The light, absent, the hope absent, the dream.... Create your path to bring the spark of humanity back, bring back the light the fight the, bring back our birth wright we will not disappear we will not run no we will stand and fight for our kind and our honour, our house will stand above the wrest for we are (clan name).
4
Hope...Dreams....the two most powerful weapons we have left, our bodies, our weapons, our life...You will use the tools you are gifted, the tools you find, you will use against the enemy. The last safe city needs you. So stand and fight against the oppression, the overwhelming odds....There will be many battles, there will be much blood shed yet we will stand victories. (clan name) unite!
5
Many died in the dark times. Many died building what you call home. Many of you are related to them. Many of them died for a dream, a glimmer of hope. one that was lost many years ago but you, the pioneers of the dreams and hope of a entire species wrest on you, for your ancestors, for your families, for the children, for those who will rebuild. everyone has a reason to fight, in there own way, and use that to your advantage, take what you have learned and tame that of which once was our home. Thousand stand in front of you, millions behind you....
(clan name) Guns at the ready and see you star side.
Leave you choices in the comments as well as tips and I will improve upon the favourite.
See you star side.
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I liked 2 until the we want you line at the end. barring that change I'm picking 3
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Thank you on your comments and I am doing my best to improve the favourites.
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I've got to say...I doubted the Xbox players in this clan...but it seems you guys are being active and creative...I expect no less from an admin though, good job :)
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I agree with the others. All are good. I like one the most. But I also like how 2 ends.
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I don't like 5 it just kinda feels like it was written by a middle schooler, the other 4 are cool though.
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I like all of them
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(1) Great!
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I like 1 but they are a few grammatical errors and word choice like "the darkness and its grunts" and "the light covered". Just saying.
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