I really like this! It actually reads like a grimoire card due to the first-person narrative. I reads very well, and it had some very good moments. I don't know if you've checked out my work before, but if you want, here's a link to one of my stories. See if you like it. We writers have to stick together! ;) http://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/90052905?lc=1033