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2/12/2013 8:32:48 AM
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After the Sirens

~music to accompany~ [quote]air raid sirens drawling out a laconic panoply of disassociated distress; it's enough to make a blind man hunchbacked, where's the threat? this ain't no game of checkers, O' winged one, with the man in the street now guessing, guessing still guessing, guessing, for an age; wrap his intuition around a brick to kick along the ground amid gas, glass, flames and condescension, how trite, how unapplicable- if all is a shadow could it flicker?- would a long shadow flicker gold and silver? amid gas, glass and flames could all that fell into darkness be tossed about, perhaps exhumed? after the sirens[/quote] I wrote this a while back, it is inspired, in part, by this piece by Dylan Thomas: [url=http://www.poemhunter.com/poem/a-refusal-to-mourn-the-death-by-fire-of-a-child/]A Refusal to Mourn the Death, by Fire, of a Child in London.[/url] One of my favourite poems. Of course my piece has its own meanings and deals with its own concerns, but I really like the imagery surrounding an air raid as a vehicle for darker poetic discussion.

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  • Perhaps I'm reading it odd, but the last line feels out of place in terms of flow. A pause helps it though. The poem's just so smooth and then it hits that and ruins the impact for me. Once again, probably just how I'm reading it. And I'm so happy you liked Thomas' poem. Everybody I talk to doesn't know about him besides "Do not go gentle into that good night." Hell, if that.

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