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10/2/2018 1:09:43 AM
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I don’t know if this is any good or not so if anyone reads this could you let me know if this is actually worth writing. I have two more logs written but I’m curious if people actually like this.
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This is pretty cool, you have good grammar, continuous dialogue, some humor, drama, and it is Destiny. However I noticed that every once in a while you will do a weird “thing” whenever you are describing a person or object. An example of this is the very beginning where it is describing the two of them, It felt somewhat clunky and not ver flowing when I was reading it. However I am not qualified to be a judge of this so I might be wrong. Anyways it’s pretty good and I believe it has potential to be s great story. Keep at it.
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Thank you so much! I need an editor, but my friend has agreed to do that for me so over time I’ll try to fix the clunkiness with his help.
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Sounds great, I can’t wait too see the new chapters rolling out. :)
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Thank you, I’ll try to post every week though I’m hesitant to promise anything. Here’s the link to the second chapter. https://www.bungie.net/en/Forum/Post/249015368/0/0
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Edited by SamsungS3player: 10/6/2018 2:48:20 PMDon’t worry about making a promise to have them rolling out every week, when you are ready you can do that. But if you don’t feel confident about it just take some more time to go over it until you feel as though it’s ready. It’s up to you man, they belong to you and you decide when to put them out. [spoiler]thanks for the sneak peek :) [/spoiler]
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Thank you
