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1/7/2018 9:46:17 PM
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This is interesting but I don’t understand what the grinding noise was or why the intruder took your pillow.
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Just posted another one. I'm working on a very long one atm. But it won't be finished for another week or two. The new one is an improvement over this one.
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Cool I’ll go check it out.
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To rest on something. And probably crept up the stairs I was looking away in the basement. Like I said, this is me experimenting. I'll do better.
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I don’t mean to be rude. I like this. But I’m trying to give some constructive criticism. You never really explain what the grinding noise was that first woke you up. If you did then it could add to the suspense.
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I know what you're doing. I appreciate it. I'm no Stephen King lmao. Thanks. I'll have more original, scarier, and longer stories in the future.
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I look forward to them. Also so far your endings are better then king’s. He always messes up the endings.
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How so? I haven't read many of his books. Explain, please. Not saying you're wrong.
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At least in my opinion his endings often come out left field and don’t do a great job of wrapping up the story. For instance It ends with a child orgy.
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That’s messed up
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Yeah. I think it’s poetic and metaphorical for loosing their innocence but still. An orgy of eleven year olds is pretty weird.
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