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Wow, dude, that shit was good.
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Thank you.
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So um...just one question[spoiler]Why'd you put that in this thread?[/spoiler]
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Well obviously the goal is to make your own story and I did I just wanted to see if a lot of people would like this story. The question is though do you?
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I mean it's a good story but this is a roleplay thread, which means you create a character to roleplay with, not write a story
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I know it's a role play section but sometimes a story is better. I just felt like doing it no point of sending it somewhere else now that I posted it.
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That is true but it doesn't really make sense that you put it here
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Nothing ever makes sense my friend. Just go with the flow that I like doing stories for fun next time I'll put a story in the off topic section and see what happens lol
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Why not make an entirely separate post [i]just[/i] for stories?
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That's a good idea!
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Yeah!
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Lol I actually made one to I'll have two stories one on here and one on my topic.
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I would break it up. A giant wall of text is hard to read, other wise good story and grammar.
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I can't do that it keeps saying I have to many paragraphs everyone time I try it says I can't go then 4.
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Oh, I mean like this. John walked up a hill and saw a ogre, the ogre saw John and took a few giant steps towards him. John backed up and pulled his sword from his sheath, he readied himself for the battle ahead of him. Then you would simply continue the next part of the story here. As it is a different section of the story.
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Look at it now tell me if you like that better.
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There you go man! So much better, on your way bro.
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Grammar...
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I actually went through this a lot and fixed my grammar mistakes but I don't see anymore I'll check on it though.
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Edited by Dr J Legend: 12/1/2015 2:52:48 AMJust small mistakes. Great story though. Suggestion- add quotations around the speaking parts, just something that bugs me
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Sounds good and thanks.
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Holy shit!
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You like it?