The Vanguards of Dead Orbit - Fan Fiction

Hello, like many of you I've tried my hand at writing my own take on the world of Destiny. This is my first time writing so I expect to have a bumpy start. My first three chapters are available for reading on the link above, my fourth is currently pending review and I finished the rough draft of chapter five last night. If anyone does take the time to have a read I'd really appreciate it and I look forward to any advice you may have on how I can improve my story telling. I hope you enjoy the story and I wish you good luck with your own projects.