You might need to make this shorter, it was 92 words over the limit and I don't think they'll judge it if it is that much over the limit. I will say although that I like how descriptive you are of the characters thoughts and feelings, I also like the ominous exploration and the mysterious ending. The only criticism I can give is that, the beginning seems slightly out of place, it seems like it would only need minor alterations to improve your story. Good job though, I enjoyed your story.