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originally posted in:The Black Garden
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Edited by Ocean Man:
4/24/2013 12:02:38 AM
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My First Short Story.
My character's intro. It was a fun process. Hope you like it. Please put down any criticism, I'll be open and it'll help me improve.
Thanks to DarkBandit for editing it.
If you want to try writing some fan fic, join The Black Garden.
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2 Repliesa lot of minor spelling mistakes. Normally they don't bother me but you had several per page and sometimes per paragraph. I suggest some editing on it. The story was solid, although a bit fast paced in my opinion. Other than that though completely solid.
