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Edited by jibble421: 4/18/2020 4:25:05 PM
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Jibble and Crowleys entry

Project Spinel (The bot is speaking in Binary. This is it’s inside thoughts, so to speak.) (BOT///GRDNER-42–LOG-1)- “Why...why is the ship in pieces? Where am I?” PRIORITY-1 ACTIVATED... The bot awakes in the wreckage of the ship, in a massive forest* “Find the plants. Keep them functioning. No more, no less.” “Where is the armory? I must find a suitable weapon to protect my plants.” The little spider bot scurries off to find the armory. As he is looking for the armory, he finds a unknown animal scarfing down the leaves and parts of other plants that didn’t survive the crash* “ENEMY TARGETED. ACTIVATING PROTOCOL 13...” The spider’s legs whir with hydraulics, and mechanisms extend long, thin, razor sharp blades, ready to slice anyone who dares to harm his plants to pieces* “Bring it.” The little bot motions to the wolf-like animal with it’s right leg, and prepares for battle* The wolf rushes the little bot, and the bot is thrown back into the smashed wall, underestimating the top speed of the wolf like creature* Our minuscule hero, micro sized against the creature, decides to alter his tactics* The wolf runs at the bot again and tries to bite its legs off* As the wolf is running, the bots legs flash once, twice, three times, and the wolf falls, fatally injured* He scrabbles over to the remnants of the plants, and scans them to see if they are salvageable* “Plants not alive. Must move on.” He walks into the armory, and finds a lethal shock prod, one hit blasts the target with over 1.2 million volts. Instant cardiac failure. He also jumps into a configuration machine that lets him roll around in a ball like a droideka* “Must find plants...” The bot rolls up into a ball, and heads off looking for the people who stole his plants* As he is trundling along the forest path, he spots a humanoid dragging a sledge full of plants from the ship* The bot rolls up, and demands the plants to be turned over to him* “GIVE ME THE PLANT.” The humanoid makes a squeaking sound and keeps walking along the path, ignoring the bot* “Fine.” The bot takes out his shock prod, and jabs it into the posterior of the plant stealer* “SREEEEEEEE!!” The humanoid screams, and a smell of cooked flesh fills the air, surprisingly the humanoid doesn’t fall down dead* “GIVE ME THE PLANT.” The humanoid runs off, leaving the sledge behind* “Plants acquired. Must find suitable place to plant.” The bot grabs the sledge, and starts to look for a place to plant* He finds a nice and shady spot in a one way accessible grove, but he finds it full of little animals* “Site not suitable. Must continue.” He leaves the grove, and starts to go towards a mountain in the distance* As he is scurrying up the side of the mountain, he spots a large, rhino like creature, digging up roots and chowing down* “Enemy marked. Must find suitable transplantation site.” As he is looking, the creature notices the pile of leafy greens on the sledge, and attempts to walk over to the sledge and eat them* “NO! DO NOT TOUCH THE PLANTS!” The creature being a non-sentient entity, ignores the minuscule bot compared to itself, and shreds a plant in its maw* “NO!” He charges his prod, and shocks the beast* It falls down apparently dead* “Good. Must find site.” He scurries slightly faster up the mountainside, until he hears thundering from the base* He turns, and is slammed into the side of the cliff by a colossal horn, the creature he shocked is alive! “37;6/!-must-);$28;-save-483);$37?;.@+-plants-;$/7;778” As his various systems are failing due to catastrophic damage, he crawls over, and throws the sledge into a hole, himself falling down with it* 36 YEARS LATER, A human in a suit is walking along a mountainside. As she spots a hole, she runs over to look into it, and the ground crumbles and she falls into a underground “HELP! DOES ANYONE HEAR ME?!?” She swims to the underground river bank, and climbs up onto a weirdly soft surface* As she grabs handholds, and footholds, the plants start to ripple with a amazing, luminous light, illuminating a broken bot body, and a bioluminescent cavern...

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  • The pacing here feels really off, I'll be honest. There seems to be a lot of unnecessary parts, that don't really do anything to help move the plot along, and I don't really understand why a gardener robot would need weapon systems, or why its first thought was to grab a weapon. The description of the weapon he found, and the actual effects it left on its targets seem very different from eachother, and neither the human, nor the beast seemed to actually acknowledge the fact that they were just.. Y'know. Shot. You also could've benefitted from the use of a few more pronouns. You used a lot of repeated nouns, especially during the fight with the wolf.. I still enjoyed the read, though! Good job!

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