You're kind of simple, huh? [spoiler]I get that it's supposed to be satire, but satire is supposed to use humor/sarcasm to illustrate the flaws in an idea. Your attempt did not succeed. It wasn't humorous, and you really sound like you're whining and bitching. Putting a tag at the end does not make it successful satire. Satire succeeds when you are able to differentiate between the joke and the object of parody/satire; confusing the reader by failing to demonstrate an actual satirical statement is an abject failure.[/spoiler] [spoiler]And before you get all pissed and high and mighty, I graduated with an English degree, so I know what I'm talking about.[/spoiler]